When I was 6 years old I had to leave my country. My name is Josh and this is my story.
One night, a stormy night out the window I heard so much shooting and stuff going KABOOM. I went to my Mum and said there are booms and shooting going on outside. “I know, we need to go, now get your stuff and lets go” said mum. So I went to my room and got some stuff but when I was packing my stuff, we herd a knock at the door but, we ignored it we hid in the room.
We were silent for a long time, then we left the house very silently. But people saw us and we started to run, we went through the jungle and over the mountains and far far from home. We went to the boat place and got a boat but people with guns sore us, and started to shot at us but we got out and made it to sea.
After 16 hours of floating we made it to land this place was named Iraq it was secreey but we. left and went on the boat. We were out there for a long long time. But we made it to a place and this was a little island but we stayed there for two days.
Then we went out to sea again then we came across a plass we didn’t now so we went in the country but the borders were shout. So we couldn't get in there were people with mini guns and just guns.
They didn’t let us in so we had to leave. We did we couldn’t find a place to stay we went to island after island after island and all of the borders were closed. We had to stay out sea we ran out of fuel. Until a fishing boat came and said do you need a ride and we said yes we ran out of fuel.
So we jumped on the boat and they went to a country called New Zealand it was a nice country. There were fruit like mango, applies and pears my favorite.
This country was a good country and this good country is called New Zealand.
THE END
Hi Kupa I like how you put that you looked out the window and you had to lav your house.
ReplyDeleteHi Kupa! I like how long your blog post is and how you said they ran out of fuel. There are a few spelling errors here and there but otherwise it's good. I also wrote a story about refugees.
ReplyDeleteHi I like the way you were found by a fishing boat.
ReplyDeleteKia Ora Kupa,
ReplyDeleteIts me Carys. I really like the bit were you keep on going Island after island because it tells the reader that they went on lots of Islands and it took a long time because they ran out of fuel. Remember to check your spelling, punctuation and were you put the words.
Hi kupa it's Leon I really like your story I really liked the KABOOM it adds lots mre detail!
ReplyDeleteHi its Fergus i really like the 2 paragraph.I have been learning about refugees to.It would to be easier to read if there was punctuation.
ReplyDeleteHey Kupa, The story was amazing! I love the way you wrote about what happened and how it happened! I've wrote about my family and I going in a boat too! I think maybe next time you can add more detail? But it was great anyways!
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